I REALLY notice titles. Doesn’t everybody? We all have picked up books based titles, and I want people to pick up my book based on the title.
So here is my title change story.
I liked my old title, THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON, and I felt it was a title that kids would like. I felt people would pick it up. After all, dragons are on Tara Lazar’s list of 500+ Things That Kids Like. But the more I thought about it, the more I wanted my title to be a glimpse into my story. A lure. And I had an idea that my title could accomplish this better by adding a few words. So I researched. I looked at title length. I looked at title layouts on covers. I thought. And thought some more. I let the new title wander around in my brain a while. I said it out loud in my house. I said it out loud while walking and driving. I typed it out and stared at it. I thought about people saying, “Oh, you must read MY OLD TITLE or MY NEW TITLE.” Which was better? I tried it out on some family and friends. And then I decided to approach my editor. I wanted her expertise and I knew from our working relationship that she would listen to my reasons and tell me her honest thoughts.
She liked my new title! She agreed with my reasoning.
So . . . THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON
is now
*drum roll*
THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON WHO SWALLOWED A KNIGHT
I’m very excited about the title change. It’s really a pretty simple change and may not seem like much to get excited over. After all, it’s only four more words. But to me it was a big decision, and the excitement comes from the feeling that I have given it the thought a title deserves.
Like I said, I had my reasons for wanting the change. Here they are. Maybe some of my “thinking through” will strike a chord with you if you’re wondering about a title.
- THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON was fun. And it’s a good title. But THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON WHO SWALLOWED A KNIGHT gives a more tempting glimpse into my story and is a great title and even more fun 🙂
- Not only do dragons make Tara Lazar’s list of 500+ Things That Kids Like, but so do knights. So I now have two things that kids like! Double the title temptation. (Even without Tara’s list, I knew that kids liked dragons AND knights, but I wanted to mention her list here because I refer to it often and thought all of you may benefit from Tara’s list, too. It’s an idea generator!)
- I noticed that a lot of THERE WAS AN OLD LADY WHO SWALLOWED A FLY retellings included not only the swallow-er, but the swallow-ee. I felt there was good reason for this. The reason being . . .some of the titles made me laugh before I ever opened the books! Really . . . THAT swallowed THAT? Funny! I want to read more.
So there you have it. A lot of thought. A simple change. And hopefully a title that will draw readers to the tale of an old dragon who swallows a knight.
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Penny Parker Klostermann’s debut picture book, There Was An Old Dragon Who Swallowed a Knight, is coming from Random House Children’s Publishing Fall 2015. You can follow her on Twitter @pklostermann and visit her blog HERE. Penny is represented by Tricia Lawrence.
I love the new title, Penny!
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Thanks, Mary. I appreciate you stopping by.
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I love it too Penny! When will it be released?
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I don’t have an exact date, but it’s coming Fall, 2015.
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Love the title change! It’s gonna fly off the shelves!
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Thanks, Tara! I certainly hope so 🙂
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It’s perfect! The old title was a fine title, but the new title makes me laugh.
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Awesome! Laughing is good!
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I think this is an excellent change, Penny! I cannot wait to have you sitting on my shelf. 😉 (And you’re right about Tara’s great list.)
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I can’t wait to be sitting on your shelf! Just think…my dragon in Italy!
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I Know a New Book I’d Be Willing to Buy!
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Great reply, Juliana! Thanks for reading my post.
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Great change of title, Penny! With my new book out on August 19th, I did the opposite – I made it shorter. The working title (for all the years when it was floating around waiting to be accepted) was WHEN I TUCK YOU IN. The sales staff at FSG wanted the word bedtime inserted somewhere, which I felt ruined the flow. Like you, I thought on it a long while, then changed it to TUCK-IN TIME. The editor and the sales staff were all happy – and I was relieved!!
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TUCK-IN TIME is a perfect title. It’s one of those that readers will pick up based on the title. It’s great you put thought into it because it’s much better than the original in my opinion! And I will have my copy next week!!!
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I LOVE the new title! Definitely more alluring!
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Thanks,Darshana. Alluring is a good way to describe those titles that grab us.
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I love it, Penny! For all the reasons you said!
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Thanks, Tara!
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Great title, Penny! I plan to buy this book anyway of course, but if I didn’t, I’m pretty sure my son would make me!
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You are all making me feel even better about my decision!
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So much better! Very alluring title!
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Yep! I like the word alluring to describe a title 🙂
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Can I pre-order?
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It’s too soon. Doesn’t come out til Fall 2015. But when it is available…I’d love for you to pre-order!
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It is kind of amazing the difference a couple of words can make. This title is even funnier.
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It is, isn’t it? Just like in our manuscripts when we change a word and it makes all the difference.
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I think it will make kids more likely to reach for it!
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Me too, Kristin. Thanks for the affirmation.
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What a great hook!! Your extra words definitely makes it a ‘must read’ from the title!!! Can’t Wait!!!
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Kim, I can’t wait either! I’m so excited!!!
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Great new title! So fun knowing the swallow-ee! (Plus, a dragon’s gotta eat.) 😉
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Yes! And he eats plenty! Thanks for reading my post and helping celebrate my new title 🙂
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Great title, Penny. It promises fun and excitement along with familiarity. Can’t wait to see the book when it comes out. Exciting!
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Thanks,Alayne! It really is exciting 🙂
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Oh, I love the new title, Penny! And kids will, too. Bravo!
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Thanks, Donna. I figure if a kid can resist just a dragon, they can’t resist a dragon AND a knight 🙂
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Thanks so much for sharing this, Penny! I know that for me, I sometimes get too comfortable with what I’ve done, either with title or plot or character…it’s only recently this year…after taking Susanna’s Making Picture Book Magic Class…and Kristen Fulton’s Non Fiction Archaeology…that I see how important it is to be open to change, big and small. Congrats again – can’t wait to buy a copy of your book!
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It is easy to get too comfortable with our writing. Classes really help me to focus, too, and to make sure my work is the best it can be! Thanks for reading the post!
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Penny – thanks for sharing your process. Isn’t it amazing how one small change can take so much thought? The best is once you’ve made the decision, and it then seems so obvious it was the right decision all along! Can’t wait tot read it.
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Sometimes I want to tell myself that I over think things. But when it comes to stories/titles/etc., I think we do have to give a lot of thought to get to the right decision!
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LOVE IT! I also love how you chewed on it awhile. I’m chewing on one right now. I think it’s much better than the other THREE titles the story has had. Ha. I’ll be happy to have your book on our bookshelves.
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I hope your chewing results in a title that you love!!! And I can’t wait for my book to be on bookshelves!
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Love the new title, AND your clever, funny story! Can’t wait to see it in print!
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Thanks, Chris! I’m very excited! Now it’s only one year away instead of two. LOL
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Penny, I love the new title. The story starts right on the cover and I know it will have little ones itching to get inside (or some other apt metaphor but I’ve been on vacation and my brain is mush.)
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Isn’t it great how the story starts right on the cover!!! That was thrilling to me!
Glad you got to the brain-mush point 🙂 Must’ve been a great vacation!
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Love the change! It has a rhythm that bounces around in your head and stays with you. I think my great-nephew will love it! 😉
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Thanks, Maryanne. I hope great-nephews everywhere love it! Thanks for coming by the blog 🙂
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I like the change. It’s more catchy and leaves you wondering about more than just one thing.
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